I noticed this looks different than your usual art style. Ether that or I really need to catch up.
I like the little highlights you experimented with. I remember how you mentioned you are usually busy with personal life, but when you get the time to draw I recommend playing with those types of highlights under different lighting and weather conditions. (day, night, sunset, rain, etc.)
The tight framing is an excellent choice for the context of the scene. I like your style and lighting considerations as well. The position and angling of the two characters for me creates a mild telescopic effect, which really helps with the mise en scene, cinematic quality. KEEP IT UP!